Survival

She spreads her legs
wide for their pleasure
how many today?

She loses touch with
what’s only a number

another man who sweats and
heaves and cries when done

they grunt and lick and feel

later

she walks along the river
holding hands with a man
that knows how to love

she dreams

of children laughing
in the yard

she prays

this man will finish soon
have his way be gone
leave his money on the stand

she wants

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22 thoughts on “Survival

  1. I like it, though I never thought people should be concerned with “numbers” anyway. Who cares how many there have been. That’s what I think. Though I know you were going a different direction with it, that was just the first thing that popped in my head when I read the first part. lol

  2. Oopsie! Been way too much going on and me been way too busy!
    This one rocks Mums–really conveys that feeling of a painful tearing-away from the present reality of one’s circumstances to….hope…
    Beautiful–

    • I know the pain you are going through JC – I am getting quite exhausted by it all. It’s damn hard work this writing! However I thank you most graciously for reading and what you have written – makes me tingle lingle …oh dear the words that I type… Pssst you are forgiven πŸ™‚

  3. I like the juxtaposition between the inner voice and the reality: nicely done. I’d still like to see a little more show and a little less tell though. Really loved your metaphor poem rambly πŸ™‚

    • I still battle with that sadly – hopefully I am finding my wings, after so many years of showing and rhyming…it’s hard to teach a an old dog new tricks πŸ™‚ I shall forge on however and thank you sweety for both your comments-appreciated
      πŸ™‚

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