What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: ABANDONED
I stood, raindrops spilling from my eyes, down my cheek, into my mouth, I watched
you walk away, you thought I would not understand or be able to feel pain, I gripped
his hand, as I listened to your footsteps walk the gravel path, no backward glance.
Don’t leave me, don’t go, my nose began to run, this isn’t hard to do.
I’m three, mummy don’t abandon me… all I want and need is you.
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This was for:
Ramblings From A Mum 
Heart wrenching. Very well written.
Thank you Ann for popping by and commenting.
Heart wrenching….
From a child’s perspective the the most heart wrenching moment if her mother left her. Thank you Bo.
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Oh so sad – but brilliant! 😉
Thanks ma’ darling 🙂 xx
I do believe you’ve accomplished the goal. At least I felt like I’d been punched. Way to go for the gut! 😉
Sorry if I hurt you :-(, but happy in a way I did 😉 thanks Kyred.
I am debating on taking on this challenge of yours …I fear what I might write would be too much
You should pop into some of these other sites – I love them, they provide so much inspiration and challenges to the brain. Email me prior to submitting?
Mr S read this and before he got to the bottom line he said a kids 1st day of School – I read and yes it very well could be that! Remember – “Nothing any writer writes is too much” xxx
I think mine would have been too dark….but….maybe not…
Oh that’s sad!! Hugs xxxxxx
A bit of a teary one 😦 xxx
Divorce can be a sad experience for the mother giving up her child, as well as terrifying experience for the young child who has no real idea of why this is happening. Thought provoking. Good response to the prompt.
Thank you very much for the visit and the comment. This took on so many different meanings, orphanage, divorce, first day of school, I am amazed what everyone reads in the words.
That’s what’s wonderful about Lillie’s FSF. Hope you’ll take a look at my endeavors if/when you get the chance.
The feelings of a small child often get missed when an adult feels the need to go their own way, but their emotions run just as deep, very sad.
Hello Lisa – thank you for the visit. Yes unfortunately the child is often thought as being just that…when inner feelings or words cannot be expressed only by tears and inner thoughts.. Appreciated your comment.