Another Inspiration from Trifecta Week 70 The word is LUCKY (adjective) The 3rd definition to be used. Please remember: Your response must be between 33 and 333 words. You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
The word itself needs to be included in your response.
You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
1: having good luck
2: happening by chance : fortuitous
3: producing or resulting in good by chance : favorable
I am the Lucky One
Lives interwoven as folded leaves
upon the vine love coursed through my veins
pumped to my heart
kindred spirits found in time
who knew we would have these
moments this chance
…..to experience love so rare
a meeting of two strangers
unity of body and of mind
…..this mate of souls
it was luck that brought you to me
sun filled morns’ and candled nights
shades of your face smiling
…..reach out to me now
I hear you whisper
…..”I will now and forever be yours”
but as I stand
…..beside your grave
my pain cannot be doused
my tears are molten gems
that spring from the red volcano
…..known only as my heart
I welcome your critique – hopefully I written as indicated in the 3rd meaning.
I like the style of your verse. The last stanza (if that is the right term) is a killer.
Hi Ted yes you are right – they are stanzas 🙂 Thank you I appreciate you reading and liking!
Oh no! It made me want to cry! lol hugs xxxxx
so was that a cry or a laugh or a bit of both 🙂 ? xx
No sad:( hugs xx
Hmm now that you mentioned it..
That was powerful! Am I right in thinking there’s a certain irony in the title?
Sandra you have amazed me by picking that up – so thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed. Thanks for reading.
I really liked the poem. Especially the sentiment. Love is a rare and divine thing. http://annbennett2.blogspot.com
Thank you Ann very much for your kind thoughts and for reading.
I absolutely love this! You are just so good!
Blushes and thanks you xxx
Tears like molten gems…oh Rambly, that’s gorgeous! This piece was so sad, but so beautifully written too!
High praise and I thank you so much for your kindness and reading.
I hear ya.
then I am glad 🙂
It was so happy and then wait…oh no, so sad 😦
The last stanza was killer. Well done!
I am so pleased you liked the last stanza Beck it is my favourite also, xx Sorry for the sad bit. 😦
I alway love your posts rambly this is no different great jobQ
Sam you are too kind. I hope you can read ‘walk on’ I would be interested in your thoughts. Thank you so much for your lovely comment.
This is quite beautiful. Even when the death is revealed, it still holds a sort of beauty. You did a lovely job!
I hoped that it felt that way, thank you so much.
This is beautiful. They obviously had a loving relationship, so it’s hard to not feel sad when death separates them (physically, at least.)
Janna thank you, yes I thought of my parents (both living) and their relationship and how it has probably been for them and how the one who is left will be able to go on without the other.
Cool use of form with the elipses, and I especially liked your description of “candled nights” instead of candle-lit or something less evocative like that. Sad turn at the end, but definitely effective !
Brian thank you. Yes I too felt candled nights felt right. Yes, sadly a bitter ending, but at least she had found love. Appreciate you reading and commenting.
Pingback: Lucky!!! | Beyond Beauty Tips
I felt that visceral twist as she stood at the grave. So beautiful. I like, as the the title indicates, that she considers herself lucky to have experienced such a love. Wonderful!
Appreciated Steph and honoured for the comments and read.
Soul stirring-I felt my eyes moisten reading it!
Thank you gorgeous, I am glad it brought up emotions… in a god way though I hope 🙂 x
:-)yes it did
This is a beautiful, heart wrenching poem. Well done.
LD thank you so much, I am glad you enjoyed as much I perhaps did writing it.
whoa, nice turn in the end – totally unexpected.
the last stanza is awesome – love the volcano, perfect.
Thank you sweet-pea, really appreciate you taking the time to visit and comment, I am humbled. x
Pingback: Lucky - Trifecta Writing Challenge | Things To Rave About