Pic – courtesy Jeffrey Smith
tell me are your dreams
consumed
darkness disturbing
restless whisperings
invading your head
bellowing clouds
fighting in the storm
that will not let
you rest
do you want to scream
are you lost like ships at sea
embattled for war
against thoughts that
toss and turn
and those that tear
away at you
voices entombed like
castle walls
around
your world
can no one hear you
have you walked those steps
seeking help
but silently
retreat
believing the door will
never open
no one will ever answer
or show you the way
does no one care
do you wish for the beacon
to guide your journey back
to finding yourself
out of the dark
out of the grey
to trust
to feel
to live
to love
speak
For Contributor – http://ermiliablog.wordpress.com/category/picture-it-write/
this is a very dark and beautiful piece like the storm within that you describe
Thank you Beth – I was not thinking of what I am going through with my parents when I wrote, but I re-read and yes some of it is fitting to my current situation. Thank you for your lovely comment. x
This appears to come not just from the inspiration of a picture … but from within…and I hope there is peace and calmness to be found soon.
But the picture – I look at it…and this may sound blasphemous to some … but it looks to be a statement on the nature of the Christianity. As the lone figure stands in the high tower … the tower with the crosses. Is he lord of the wreckage that surrounds? Or a captive, surveying life around him? Or both? Tis my interpretation of the photo.
It amazes how in depth you are and what I write and others for that matter brings out your SoC, you are right to some extent about being from within a little. I really think you should try entering these – it does not have to be verse …give it a try I would like to see your interpretation in words 🙂 xxx
beautiful and lovely interpretation..i loved your voice.
Soumyav – thank you so much that is a wonderful compliment from a writer as yourself. Appreciate you reading. x
Yes.
Indeed – thank you hun 🙂 x
Reblogged this on Knocked over by a feather and commented:
Very powerful.
WOW thank you Merby for re-blogging – how sweet of you! I actually got up in the middle of the night because I wasn’t happy with it and change 3 lines before I hit the update button… the things we do… xxxx
I know, I edit constantly…perfectionists we are, eh? You are welcome. xx
mwaahhhh to you my little perfectionist friend xxx
Right back at ya!!! xx
🙂 luvs ya face x
🙂 luvs ya too!!! x
awww shucks 🙂 xx
Absolutely beautiful!
Thank you my friend – thank you xx
Good take on the prompt!
J2 thanks very much for reading – I must go and read others now – I have been a little consumed 🙂
Beautiful
HUGS
Thank you Eunice {{hugs and kisses back}}
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We will be in the 70’s today 2 days ago there was snow not here thankfully but close very close lol this weekend in the 90’s man New England at it’s finest!
Must paint today!
Painting as on easel or on house? I long the warmth and we have only just finished it 😦 xx
HOUSE. She has been my easel for 2 years now I have to work around injuries and weather lol We had a week of heavy rains so yesterday I sat in the sun, planted new items in the yard and rested up for today. No weigh-in for me today I shall go up and down a ladder and ready my homes outside for my sons arrival 🙂
Rain coming tonight and for 2 days I think then raging heat when I will turn AC’s on and clean out kitchen drawers 🙂
Have an awesome day!
I like the way you say she has been my easel. How excited you must be – even to see you write ‘my son’s arrival’ I bet that gives you goose bumps 🙂 We will have rain and 6 deg C mornings…I hate it.. you have fun cleaning out your drawers 😉 xx
Thanks!
It does I have to Pinch MYSELF lol
brrr I feel your pain I HATE WINTER
Stay warm and dry!
XX
Thank you sweety and I appreciate your visits – go off and pinch 😉 xx
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Lovely! So sorry I haven’t been commenting on your posts. For some reason I couldn’t find you in my feed.
Hello young lady – that’s okay, it’s hard to keep up sometimes, I am happy to see you back and thank you so much for reading and your kindness. x
I like the strength you gave to a single word at the end.
Anne Thank you – Believe it or not that was my favourite word in the piece. Those that are surrounded by dark can be helped if they could only ….speak. Appreciate you reading.
I’m a mess mumsy! I just reblogged something Penny wrote and I broke down. Now I read this and have fallen again…Not good ah! I think Its all just a little real to me. The words feel like someone has entered your mind and spoken for you. Weird, right? Hugs Paula xxxxx
I am soo sorry sweety – I didn’t mean to upset you or anyone with this. This came into my head when I saw the photo, this was a little part of me, but more so for others who suffer dark moments…that all they have to do to come alive again perhaps is to …let others know how they feel and ‘speak’ {{hugs for making you sad}} xxx
No..I’m sorry for falling part. I know the dark moments well, this is why I reacted. Hugs Mumsy….xxxxx
Be brave my girl – no more darkness for you… EVER! xxx
Thank you! xx
xx 🙂 (hugs hard)
Great questions of internal dilemmas. I like the personification you’ve given the image. Beautifully done.
I appreciate your kindness as usual Maggie – thank you for reading x
Jen, what a powerful piece. the last stanza is extravagant – love how you wrapped this one up…
to trust
to feel
to live
to love
speak
… perfect. xx
thanks for the hint – i will make sure to not miss any future prompts 🙂
Thank you Miri – that is so complimentary (blush) – you are welcome and there are others also VisDare, Alastairs are two others that I enter 🙂 xx
The build up to the final word ‘speak’ was perfect! I loved the little interruptions of the eerie phrases in italics. Great structuring. Thanks for contributing this week. A standout poem!
– Ermisenda
Thanks Ermisenda – yes I wanted the italics to stand out, especially the last one. You are welcome thanks for the photo opoortunity to use my muse. Appreciated. 🙂