entering the darkened woods
casting not a backward glance
she ran
footsteps and laboured breath
in time with hers
he followed
one by one she grasped the trees
fingers bled, ankles grazed
there was no giving up
her screaming cry
broke the moonlight
help me
and still he followed on
her past would not let go
she stumbled in the dark
wolves called inside the mist
silencing her last scream
as it echoed through the trees
and rose to the stars
her heart began to tear
the blade cast in her back
she yelled
FORGIVE ME
blood fell from her mouth
her past no longer
haunted her
haunted him
What a thought-provoking poem! Wonderfully crafted.
Thank you – to be honest I don’t know why I wrote it, for I am not happy with it, but I thank you for reading and your kindness.
This gave me chills!
I shall say thank you Beth – but I’m in two minds after hitting publish! xx
Well, just take it for what it was, it did invoke feelings/ reactions in people and that alone may be an author’s goal at times. Like our minds and hearts, there are many parts to each of us, and our writing reflects that.
Thank you Beth – very well put, I just didn’t want those reactions because they felt they had to say something. I like your wisdom xx
Haunting and definitely very thought-provoking! Brilliant job in painting such twisted imagery!
Owl – bless you sweet for your kind comments. x
Intense!
Just a little Lyn 🙂 thank you! x
The stuff of nightmares RM. Beautifully put together.
Thank you O but you want to something – I dislike this… see my next post to understand 🙂
Wow….so dramatic. You are so creative. Beautiful job.
thanks Bec xx
That was a brilliant read..I won’t sleep tonight though 🙂
Joking.. x
What didn’t you dislike about it, you mentioned it in your newest blog also..
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Just the ‘choppiness’ of it, just didn’t sit right – but over it – all ok 🙂 x
I know you would be..
Sometimes we can all throw a blog out there almost off the cuff and because we are in a certain place in our minds etc..
It was still good by the way..
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lol – I thank yee 🙂
Thanked is takeneded 🙂
gooded 😉
🙂
dark dark DARK
aww thanks sweet -not one of my favourites though – but ‘ta’ juz the same. xx
Mmmm my lovely, where were you with this one? I read through the comments and gathered you did not like where it went. I’ll tell you what I thought at first glance, then at second. I found it dark, incredibly murky and yet at second glance, I felt a story there. A lesson. Something bigger you wanted coming out. I still like it, off or not. You have allowed your readers to react, that alone is wonderful.
xx
I am following you around – that’s where I am (at least in your comments) no I am not happy about this one – and apart from it being choppy I do not know why – thank you for reading, thank you grounding me 🙂 xx