So, dive in! At least dip your toe! Get in the flow! And sing! (But don’t get water up your nose.) The topic for the day—a body or bodies of water. For these purposes, a body of water can mean anything from an ocean to a mermaid (or man), a lake to a puddle, even, if you would, a glass, a tear, a rain drop.
FOR DVERSE ~ POET’S PUB http://dversepoets.com/2013/07/27/water-water-everywhere-surely-theres-a-poem-there/
Seabirds grace skies
circumscribed by blackened clouds
~whispering my name
ocean beyond cerulean hue
I walk ~hands splintering
on wooden rails, steepness of the
casting sandals across dampened
dunes bare foot
the crescent moon
lifting darkened green
my lips devour bubbles
kick abandoned castles
tears ~as grains soar into the air
and I dance
whirling ~arms outstretched
as soles immerse
cold against the briny deep
I give of me to the hues of blue
swirls ~spilling saltiness
‘cross my lips
swallowing the sapor of the sea
let the ocean swallow me
oh heck… the ocean swallowing her in the close…reminded me of u2 – walk to the water – the loneliness is palpable in this..
I thank you Claudia – your comments mean a great deal…thank you
nice energy in this…giving yourself over to the hues of blue…this could be taken a few ways…the taking of ones own life in the water…or immersion in such abandon, which comes across very passionate…..the you left though is where i realized…and it became heavy….
taking myself into cold waters succumbed to ‘bubbles’ from the bottle as loneliness gripped and death the only answer…thank you Brian so much for reading – and like Claudia your words help and keep me going …so thank you
I feel the grieving in this poem. The repetition of the words “You left” strengthens the feeling. I picture someone walking out in the ocean waves until being totally engulfed and overcome by the waves. Powerful poem.
Thank you Mary – tomorrow I shall be catching up and reading others – I so love the different visuals – the thought process – I am indebted to challenges set by DVerse – I am thankfu that you read and acknowledged. x
it would be lovely getting swallowed by ocean, I guess. streaming words that create quite a beautiful imagery.. 🙂
thank you HA swallowed by the sea in the midst of darkness – a lonely place to end but thank you for seeing it for the imagery.
Cerulean … What an image and feeling you give us here!
I blush at words that are given – I appreciate you felt what I have written ‘A’ – your comments always beautiful. Thank you.
You’re really expanding as a writer J. I so enjoy visiting
I am taken back… I truly am A… thank you so very very much. xx
Well, I think there is a joy here despite the ominous qualities — honestly – to be swallowed by sky and sea in terms of giving one’s self over is kind of freeing and that comes out in the dance too–the ambiguity is part of the intrigue. Thanks. k.
Manic – welcome and thank you so much for reading. I think you have pictured of what I wrote, she danced and swirled in the night …not caring of the fate of her choosing.
This is a great poem and real tension here between carefree abandoned and loneliness – which i about right.
Hello Sam – glad you visited and read – thank you for your comment 🙂
Nice one! A bit sad, but beautiful…
Ms Owl – I appreciate your comments of any nature – thank you so much. xx
I love the ocean – swallowed or not, that’s where I’d like to be 😀
I think having an affinity with a ‘special place’ is the place I’d like to rest, be it permanent or not 🙂 xx
The colors are dark, and the I like the ending verses ~ How sad but powerfully written ~
This line is my favorite: I give of me to the hues of blue ~
Thank you so very much – it humbles me when beautiful writers such as yourself read and make comment (that’s also my favourite) x
casting sandals across dampened
dunes bare foot”
… just beautiful. a delicate sadness in this… killer close, Jen!
love it. xx
awwww thank you sweet-pea, looking forward to our next challenge on Words from Here to There also 🙂 xxx
A heartfelt poem– ‘let the ocean swallow me’ expresses the emotion so well. peace, Jason
Thank you Jason – yes consumed by one’s own loneliness can seem insignificant against a vast ocean- appreciate you reading.
My prior home was 2 city blocks from the ocean. In my most stressful times, I would dive in, allowing the body of ions to absorb my troubles. Whether there is a true physical action at hand or “merely” spiritual– perhaps a combination of both, the emotional healing was profound.
You have penned this beautifully Jason.
Very visual and emotional write. An enjoyable read!
Thank you Charles for popping over and commenting. I am glad you liked as I did yours.
This brings to mind Virginia Woolf and her ending…walking into the ocean with her pockets full of stones, though in my imagination there was more grey than cerulean. This is beautiful, sad and sensitively written. And you last line is perfect.
Hello again om – thank you so much, though the colour of the ocean different, I am humbled that what I wrote brought Virginia Woolf to mind.
I appreciate you reading and commenting.