Gossamer circles hang on limb
broken by the gust of wind
stirred from skies and plunges deep
skies of black and restless sleep
Brumbies stir and gallop hills
steep their climb, strong of will
light from stars bathe the ground
grass is dark for miles around
Lightning breaks the darkness still
zig zagged lights across the hill
thunder rumbles, high in these skies
wild horses warn danger’s nigh
Leader heads them up the hills
others follow at their will
strength in bodies, they carry on
out of the darkness, from the storm
Strength of legs and hooves on earth
in this land that gave them birth
frightened with ears back, they forge
over rocks and over gorge
Elements faced in open land
together they run no time to stand
thunder roars its frightening noise
brumbies tense, calmness destroyed
Shelter as the lighting cracks
rain falls they group in their plight
herd of brumbies with stallion black
black as this night as they take flight
Storm it passes all is still
brumbies rest shake off the chill
regroup they stand with nostrils flared
none were harmed, each one was spared
For Mind Love Misery Prompt # 30 Colour
As I had been busy writing the Service for this morning – my brain is a little weary, but I was enchanted by mindlovemisery’s prompt Colour. This is a very ‘rhyming’ piece that I wrote and posted December 2012. My style has changed quite a lot since ‘those days’. Brumbies are Australian wild horses.Hope this is acceptable for the prompt. Apologies for those that may have already read this.
The prompt is –
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There is a beautiful rhythm to this that almost echoes the sound of hooves on earth. Really wonderful.
Thank you Jayde so much – that was the feel I was trying to achieve back then, I look now and see how my writing has changed in a year- thank you for kindness. 🙂
This is gorgeous, absolutely enchanting the rhyming is just divine. Wow consider me super impressed!
Oh I am impressed that you are super impressed – thank you so much – funny though how I don’t write much like this any more. We all change and grow, but I’m happy that you like it- thank you 🙂
Change and growth are good/necessary, you are very talented =)
I have ‘some’ talent – but I can’t write as many do. My writing is ..well I guess ‘states the obvious’ is the only way I can describe it – I find it hard to write with hidden meanings or agendas, which I would like to, thank you so much for such a gracious compliment – very thoughtful of you. 🙂
I have trouble with concrete, everyday life I deal more abstractions so I could learn from you
How weird it is that what we can’t do we wish to ~ smiles ~ I have tried to write abstract so many times and fail miserably. I am humbled by you saying you could learn from me…but somehow I think not. 🙂 x
Oh this is such a splendid piece of writing!! You had me at gossamer 🙂
Wow – thank you – I didn’t think it would get any where near this reaction to be honest. Yes I love that word too – thank you so much for your kind words Anja.:-)
I was swept away in it…it really is wonderful. Isn’t it funny how we never view our own work like others?
yes I think we are our own worst critics – the writer never seeing what the reader sees – thank you so much 🙂
You are very welcome 🙂
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Oh I love horses so much and wild horses roaming free? Oh boy how I would love to see that. So for now I got to run with them as you wrote so beautifully, Mumsy! Love and many hugs to you, Paula xxxxxxxxx
Thank you buttercups – nothing like seeing wild horses in their natural environment. … and you are free now 😉 xxx
True, Love you heaps xxx
I have to agree with Jayde-Ashe, it’s exactly what I have thought when reading it – it’s so rhythmic, like horses running through the field.. It’s enchanting and so magical to think that words are getting lost in the wind of this chilly autumn. Absolutely stunning piece.
Thank you lovely one. It pleases me that you liked it, I am taken back by the comments. Thank you for your kindness as usual – you are very sweet. 🙂 x
I love your new avatar!!!!! X
Thank you darling 🙂 do you know how I get rid of the small one at the bottom of the page – thank you but I think the large one is so ‘in your face’ as it is… having 2 pop up is really too much! 🙂 x
Hmmm. I think maybe go to your settings and remove the widget there?
looking into it now – thanks hun x
Wonderful take on the prompt! fabulous poem!! 🙂 🙂
I thank you Helen very very much 😀 x
Well done Jenny, great piece. Lovely imagery and powerful rhythms. Maybe you should write more like this.
Thank you so much Michael – I don’t know if I could go back to writing like this though…strange isn’t it – I guess it’s when the mood takes me, like all of us – perhaps one day 😉
Love the imagery and sounds. Lots of action conducive to storm and horses. 😉
Thank you Tess – appreciated you reading and your kindness 🙂 x
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lovely as always jen )
Thank you sweety – 🙂 xx
so much power in those horses thundering through…def feel it a bit as i let my mind wander reading your words….not a big end rhymer myself, but i enjoyed…smiles.
Yes, I have changed my style in the last year I have been writing, but I am glad that your mind wandered and that you enjoyed – thank you Bri. 🙂
I love the rhythm, Jen! 🙂
Thank you kindly sweet-pea 🙂 xx
A wonderful read, with some really fine imagery. Your verses were quite in rhythm with the thudding hooves of the horses… and I am a fan of end rhymes right now. Thus, it was a really delightful read for me. 🙂
Thank you anmol – yes there are times when I like them and times when I can’t stand them ~ smiles. Glad you are a fan right now though – thank you for reading. PS – How are the books? – you know I had to ask 😉
🙂 Just reading through a few pages everyday. I am really slow-paced and I get bored so very soon.
little by little…..
This is so awesome, Jen! (and I love your profile pic! 🙂 )
awww ta hunz and thank you – I only need one of them though 2 is slight overkill!! 🙂 xx