If I focus on my environment
I hear glass shatter
never broken window panes
behind closed doors
off narrow hallways
silent hues of amber
and dark red
the frailty of me
I could run
vanish from my sanctuary
but my mind a web
of gnarled branches
a narrow road that bends
sharp against the
sheer rock face
edges crumble downwards
as do I
my fate solidified
hoarse voice that screams
I stay secluded
I stay quiet
wait till voices pass
watch the woods
hold on to what I know is real
adults teach their children
what have I been taught
©jmtacken Jan 2014
As my brain could only work once this evening I wrote the above which I share with Angela at – Visdare http://anonymouslegacy1.wordpress.com/2014/01/29/visdare-46-silhouette/#comments
and the team at DVerse OpenLinkNight of D’verse Poets Pub
Absolutely wonderful! Love the imagery….such wonderful descriptive words. I could get lost in this.
Hello are you there? 😉 Oh there you are – thank you so much Anja. Appreciated.
What? Still climbing about the stanzas…..
that’s what I love to hear 🙂
Lovely Jenny great imagery. Beautifully constructed, love the repetition.
Thank you Michael, I do appreciate your comment, I do appreciate your comment..
You are singing in my heart….heart…..
This tugs at my heart but is’s lonely and sounds alienated. Is that right?
I had the pic as a challenge and I tried for over an hour, then I went into another room to write and this came forth. A piece regarding child abuse Tess, not a nice subject, but I couldn’t write anything else. She is isolated and tries to live in her own world, where she can’t be harmed.
My! You are getting very good at this! 🙂
Thank you so much hun, I was happy with the writing on this one 🙂 xx
Though sometimes the path may be narrow, it always leads somewhere. Sometimes poetry helps us find our way. Even when the rock face crumbles near us, one can keep walking on and find a place one knows is real!!
This is so true Mary we all walk narrow paths in our lives to will reach a clearing, thank you for reading 🙂 x
Great imagery in your poem, Rambly! The repetition works well and makes your voice all the more powerful.
Thank you Gabriella very kind of you.
the frailty can be felt here… love the i remain repetition…the in spite…watch the woods
hold on to what I know is real…. that’s a good thing to do…
Thank you Claudia, keeping in touch with reality is important, holding what is real when our lives shatter away..our lifeline.
nice…i like the life being the narrow path by the cliff face line…
sometimes we have to grab what we know is real and hold on tight…
the repetition of i remain as well…it lends to strength and outlasting…
sorry, been offline with computer issues….just getting back today…
Thank you B so happy you liked it, you must have catching up to do.. I don’t envy you! Glad you are back on deck 🙂
I like the repetition I remain – there is sadness and somber imagery ~ Lovely response to the prompt ~
Thank you so much Grace that line seems to have caught everybody who has read, appreciated you reading. x
this is so very painful and sad. beautiful words.
It is a little, sorry, my muse carries me with her and I got swept up in this. Thank you Beth xx
Sad.. but the I remain.. lends hope. She might make it through, stop the cycle. Strong emotion..
Yes or perhaps she has no where she can run to? Thank you for reading & commenting Steph – appreciated.
this was a beautiful poem
Thank you so much bw – appreciate your reading.
Thank you so very much for reading and your comment, very much appreciated.
The refrain, ‘I remain’, holds the power source of this piece. Beautifully written. 🙂
Hope you are having a good day.
Thank you so much anmol, I originally had ” I remain” on 2 of the stanzas until a friend said would it work on all… I took advice and glad I did. Had better days ..but ok thank you for asking. How are the books going? 🙂
So intense, so much depth.
thank you sjp.
Very intense..refrain works so well.
thank you very much BR ~ smiles