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hands held
leather handles of bags well worn
weight heavy, as my heart
I stood helpless glancing towards
mountains, close as you
to touch
bitter cold
no words forthcoming
we held glances
on the empty platform
waiting for the train
time suspended, tears were shed
how far was it you’re goin’
till you reach your destination
call me, can you ~ will you
tell me if your happy
found your way
I’ll be here should you return
if home is where you’d rather be
you want to find yourself ~ you said
will I lose you if you do
a train pulls in
a last embrace
a tender kiss
doors close
my heart held silent
begging you
to stay
©jmtacken Jan 2014
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Ramblings From A Mum 
still just as moving the next time around…
any one that reads i highly recommend clicking on the video and letting the music play while you read this…it def plays well each enhancing one another….
oh and i think you figured out that i liked it…smiles.
smiles ~ yes I do thank you *nods*
Thank you so much Brian ~ very sweet of you and thank you for the nudge – appreciate that too ~ smiles.
*tears*
I thought ‘scary’ men didn’t cry?… thank you JCC (hopefully tears that meant it got to you and not how awful it was!)
A scary man crying is one of the scariest things out there. 😉
And Yes– got me.
smiles ~ I still don;t believe your scariness you know…and thank you that means a great deal …SGG.
Well conveyed the sense of departure and loss. I think we all experience this when loved ones move on,those train station farewells can very much tear at the heartstrings. Lovely Jenny.
Yes ~ though I have never experienced I can imagine what they would be like… Thank you so much Michael.
Moving… that sense of tension as the train rolled in is well served. Nicely done.
Thank you so much for visiting Jayblue – I was just reading yours when I saw this. I appreciate you reading and your kindness.
Oh so very sad, could feel it very much so… tenderly written.
Thank you so much Panda, I appreciate you reading and your kind words.
Simply magical. A real tug at the heart with this one.
Thank you so very much, I appreciate your comment Richard.
Welcome
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this one brought tears, and the train station departure can be a metaphor for any parting of the ways.
..thank you darling Beth… and you are right..you amaze me how you read into what I write xxx
You’ve captured “that” moment so well, for all of us. How many ‘trains’ have taken a heart from someone as it pulled away? Beautifully done Jen.
Thank you so much Colleen, you are so kind x
You write beautifully. Emotionally.
I thank you once again xx
Oh, I can really feel the emotion in this poem! The saying good-bye. The hope. The yearning for the other to stay! This one sticks in my throat as I read it! Powerful fare.
Hello Mary, your are so lovely with your comments. Thank you for being moved by this and thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
So beautiful, Jen. We’ve all had that moment. Loved the music to accompany your words. Lovely in every way.<3
Thank you gorgeous, I love Enya and searched for ages for a piece that didn’t have voice, then I came across this young lady and lived it. Ps..Happy Birthday to your mum 🙂 xxx
Suspended love. So painful. This is remarkable. You’ve nailed it! 🙂
Hugs for you this morning, ready? (((. ))) lol thank you Tess that was very sweet. xx
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Touching and tragic departure, Jen. The music is beautiful and matches the prose so well. There’s something about trains pulling away that really tugs on the heart strings. Beautiful! 😀
Thank you lovely, yes I can’t imagine the emotions especially in war times, when soldiers left their loved ones at home. Thank you so very much 🙂 x
The train departing.. a really strong image for a relationship lost… very well written..
Thank you very much BR and a bonus finding the right music to match the words.
How sad and touching dear ~ And that music is making the words even more melancholy & tragic ~
Thank you Grace…music is so inspirational, I think it really does help this piece along. Have a lovely night/ day Grace.
You write loss/goodbye so well, Jenny. Every goodbye is a sort of dying. Haunting.
Beautiful…………………………………
Well done, you! I was wantin’ my hanky!
Ssshhh now lol, glad you liked though – thank you xx
I think you never lose them, if you encourage them to find themselves. At least that’s my experience so far, fingers crossed.
Hello poetrypea, thank you for visiting and commenting. What do they say if it’s meant to be set them free? Appreciate your comment. 🙂
Beautiful-my heart loved the last para the most-hope lives!
Hello sweety, haven’t seen you for so long, thank you so much, I am glad you enjoyed..we must always hope mustn’t we. Hope you are well. x
So sweet of you to remember me-thank you my dear,am good.How are you?I still write at Trifecta regularly and comment too-am not that good at poetry ,so had run away after the first time-will try to add a bit at least on open link nights-this is such a supportive and friendly community ,that I wish I could participate more.Yes,you are so right,we must never give up hope:-)Tc xx
They are amazing – so please do join us. Of course I remember, you we are a family on here, from far and wide. I am glad you are well and never say you are not good at poetry… or anything.. I am learning every minute and loving the process. Hope to see more of you. Take Care TC Jen xx
Thank you Jen-I did join and this was the second time I entered-hoping to find my footing one step at a time and yes hobnobbing with wonderful writers like you,I will definitely learn,that I am sure:-)Thank you for the love and support,,God Bless xx
Atreyee
I blush – wonderful writers – no darling – I’m still in the nest flapping my wings compared to some, but I thank you for being so very sweet. Support and encouragement to anyone who loves to write – must be continued. We all have a love and passion for writing, our commitment our goal, to inspire…you will be just fine and if I can assist you in anyway I am here, on email privately or on WP. 🙂 xx
I could feel the pain in this. True love, letting go, so hard. This is a great song.
Myrna – thank you so much for reading and your kind words.