Toddaid – Planet Gazing

Here is my first attempt at a Toddaid. A stanza comprising of a 10 syllable line, alternating with a 9 syllable line. A syllable towards the end of the 1st line rhymes with 1 in the middle of the 2nd line. Similarly lines 3 and 4. Lines 2 and 4 rhyme with each other.  This took a bit of working out I can tell you!

Gazing to heavens, seek Venus or Mars
not behind bars or caged, I stare
surely you are there, do show yourselves now
light the darkness if thou will, show me where

Overlook the Heavy ones

Poetry prompt – A twist in the tale

For this prompt you need to write a poem which has a surprise twist.

The poem should be made of four stanzas of equal length – no more than eight lines each.

The twist must be all in the final stanza.

That’s it – no required metre or anything. The rules are easy but the poem could be hard. This exercise is good for focussing on shaping the narrative in a poem.

This Prompt was set by ruleofstupid


Overweight, my foot steps are
heavy across the ground
its bitter and snow covers all around
but I am inside safe and warm
I need the rest to have a break
can’t control the food that I intake
I’m tired it’s been a hard cold year
but it’s not the tiredness that I fear

I want to shut away the world
be quiet left alone nothing to disturb
no one to listen should I moan
food is my only comfort my
self pleasure and my need
don’t judge me for what I am
don’t tsk or shake your head
for you do not know the real me

I’ve struggled this whole fall
my home my sanctuary far away
from staring eyes who think me
a disgrace people are so quick to surmise
why they think I am obese they do not know the
emptiness nor the struggles that I’ve faced
no they just seem frightened do they think perhaps I’m bad
or ashamed because of my size which truly makes me sad

No no-one hasn’t got a clue
they naturally walk the other way
not willing to get to know me
or how I feel today they look in my
direction but simply scamper by
not willing to come near me due only to my size
fear in their eyes they look upon me with abomination
but I am simply a grizzly bear ready for hibernation